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Ce corrigé essai argumentatif reprend les onze exercices dans l’ordre. Pour les productions écrites, vous trouverez un paragraphe et un essai complet rédigés comme on les attend en première, à comparer avec votre travail.

La correction détaillée

Le corrigé essai argumentatif en détail

Correction de l’exercice 1 : Le vocabulaire de l’essai
  1. c
  2. e
  3. h
  4. b
  5. g
  6. d
  7. a
  8. f
Correction de l’exercice 2 : Les étapes de l’introduction
  1. hook : un fait frappant.
  2. context : le paradoxe gaspillage / banques alimentaires.
  3. issue : la question posée.
  4. thesis : la position de l’auteur.
  5. outline : l’annonce des trois parties.
Correction de l’exercice 3 : Choisir la meilleure accroche
  1. b : une image concrète qui place le lecteur dans la scène.
  2. a : un chiffre frappant ; b est vague.
  3. a : un fait précis ; b contient une opinion floue et I think.
  4. b : une question surprenante qui intrigue.
  5. b : une image émouvante ; a est une évidence.
Correction de l’exercice 4 : Les liens logiques
  1. Firstly
  2. Furthermore
  3. However
  4. For instance
  5. As a result
  6. Although (suivi d’une proposition)
  7. therefore
  8. On balance
Correction de l’exercice 5 : Passer au registre soutenu
  1. Many young people no longer read books.
  2. Social media can be harmful to the brain.
  3. It therefore seems necessary to take action.
  4. Items such as plastic bags are extremely harmful to marine life.
  5. A total ban on phones would be unrealistic.
  6. In short, this is a serious problem.
Correction de l’exercice 6 : Le paragraphe PEEL
  1. Link
  2. Point
  3. Explanation
  4. Evidence

Ordre logique : 2 – 4 – 3 – 1 (Point, Evidence, Explanation, Link).

Correction de l’exercice 7 : Quel plan choisir ?
  1. A : question oui/non.
  2. B : question sur un problème et ses causes.
  3. C : To what extent appelle une réponse nuancée.
  4. D : citation à discuter.
  5. A : débat moral pour / contre.
  6. B : phénomène à expliquer et à résoudre.
Correction de l’exercice 8 : Corrigez les erreurs
  1. There is evidence that sport improves concentration. (indénombrable)
  2. On the other hand, sport can be dangerous.
  3. I partly agree with this idea, but it has limits. (moreover ajoute, il ne nuance pas ; la phrase se contredisait)
  4. For example, some people say that zoos protect animals. (people est pluriel)
  5. In conclusion, zoos appear to be useful. (pas de répétition, registre soutenu)
  6. Although it is expensive, the project is worth it. (ou : Despite its cost, …)
Correction de l’exercice 9 : Traduction français → anglais
  1. This raises the question of whether social media should be banned for under-16s.
  2. Firstly, let us examine the health risks.
  3. Some may argue that a ban is impossible to enforce.
  4. A case in point is the law passed in France in 2016.
  5. Consequently, stricter rules seem necessary.
  6. On balance, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
Correction de l’exercice 10 : Rédiger un paragraphe argumenté

Exemple de paragraphe :

To begin with, compulsory uniforms can reduce the social pressure linked to clothing. In many British schools, pupils wear the same blazer and tie whatever their family’s income. As a result, nobody can be judged on the brand of their trainers, and teenagers from poorer families are less likely to feel excluded. Uniforms therefore help to create a sense of equality, which is one of the main missions of a school.

Correction de l’exercice 11 : L’essai complet

Exemple d’essai (environ 270 mots) :

Every year, millions of tonnes of edible food are thrown away by supermarkets, while food banks struggle to meet demand. Should retailers be forced by law to give away their unsold products? I believe they should, for environmental and social reasons, even if such a law raises practical difficulties.

Firstly, a law would drastically reduce waste. Food that ends up in landfill releases methane, a powerful greenhouse gas. In France, a law passed in 2016 obliges large supermarkets to donate edible unsold food to charities. This example shows that legislation can change the habits of big retailers far more quickly than voluntary pledges. If one country has managed it, others have no excuse for doing nothing.

Furthermore, such a measure would help the most vulnerable. Food banks depend on donations, which are irregular. A legal obligation would guarantee a steady supply of fresh products, such as fruit and dairy, which are rarely given by individuals. Fighting waste and fighting hunger would therefore go hand in hand, and the dignity of those who receive help would be better respected.

Some may argue that the law would be costly for supermarkets, which would have to sort, store and transport the food. However, these costs can be reduced through partnerships with local charities and tax incentives. Moreover, a better image among customers could compensate for part of the expense.

All in all, obliging supermarkets to donate their unsold food appears both fair and effective. The difficulties are real but manageable. Perhaps the next step would be to encourage restaurants and school canteens to follow the same path.

Comment progresser après ce corrigé

Relisez votre essai en surlignant la phrase-thème de chaque paragraphe : si vous ne la trouvez pas, réécrivez le début du paragraphe. Constituez ensuite une réserve d’exemples précis (lois, chiffres, événements, œuvres) sur les grands thèmes du programme, et entraînez-vous à rédiger une introduction complète en dix minutes : c’est elle qui donne au correcteur sa première impression.

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